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Deviation"So, the chicken for you," Andrew pointed to Dawn. "And the beef is for you." He pointed to Rachel. "Shouldn't be too long."

"Take the umbrella with you—" Rachel's words were cut off as Andrew slammed the door in his haste to leave. "That boy will drown out there."

"Not quite, he'll just end up looking like an adorably bedraggled puppy." Dawn snorted in amusement. "Why do you think he shot out the door so fast?"

"Don't tell me he's on the pull?" Rachel groaned at Dawn's enthusiastic nodding. "I guess we won't be seeing our lunch any time soon."

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open_on_sundaychallenge #161: april showers
Part of the London!verse and the Wolf&Declán!verse

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edenfalling
24th Apr, 2006 15:21 (UTC)
Ah, Andrew being sneaky and cute and in need of a handsome stranger's umbrella. :-) He probably shouldn't do that when Dawn and Rachel are waiting for their lunch, though...

Minor suggestion: to help show that Andrew cut Rachel off by running away, you might want to punctuate the dialogue with a dash ("Take the umbrella with you--") instead of a period. It's not a grammar point, just a stylistic quibble.
redwolf
25th Apr, 2006 00:46 (UTC)
At least they know him well enough to predict his behaviour patterns and will grab lunch elsewhere instead of waiting for him.

Punctuation fixed.
kitmarlowescot2
24th Apr, 2006 22:41 (UTC)
Umm what is a pull?
redwolf
25th Apr, 2006 00:57 (UTC)
On the pull is term used to refer to the act of looking for a bit of action in the partner stakes.
kitmarlowescot2
25th Apr, 2006 02:16 (UTC)
Oh, ok who's the lucky man?
ozma914
25th Apr, 2006 08:40 (UTC)
Oh, good, I was able to read the comments and not have to ask what "pull" meant.

Now that I think about it, I'll bet they'll be fighting over him, both male and female.
redwolf
25th Apr, 2006 09:52 (UTC)
I'm sure he'll be up to his eyebrows in people wanting to rescue him from the rain.
ozma914
26th Apr, 2006 00:55 (UTC)
It's a fine line between nerd and sensitive cute guy.
mad_jaks
30th Apr, 2006 11:03 (UTC)
Poor hungry girls. huge sucker for the wet look myself but in an actual shower kind of way :D
redwolf
30th Apr, 2006 13:20 (UTC)
Maybe someone will drag him off and throw him in a proper shower.
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